Saturday, August 14, 2010

Belinda Fanfiction

Retribution

Prologue
Glaring at his reflection he thought to himself, "That two timing son of a bitch is gunna die for what he did to Sam. I'm gunna rip out his insides, string 'em up over the fires of hell, and shove 'em down his fucking mouth till he bleeds black and screams for mercy. No, screw that. I'm gunna feed 'em to his mangy little soul stealing, meat suit wearing minions."

Pay back is a bitch.


Earlier
He could hear it before he attempted to open an eye. The deafening sound of silence. Then the overly happy chirping of birds. The ecstatic squeals of children piercing his senses, reminding him of the good times when they were young boys.

It was all so blatantly obvious, but he wasn't ready.

Not yet.

He needed to stay still for a moment longer. Just a little longer. He wasn't entirely too sure what he would see, but when he opened his eyes it would all become real, and he didn't know if he could do that. He didn't know if he was strong enough to face the truth. 


As he lay on the overused motel bed, springs threatening to dig into his side, he slowly became more attuned to his surroundings. The room was beginning to take on a musky odour, having been deprived of fresh air for over a week. The quiet hum of the ice box, and the faint scent of Sams favourite cheap cologne from Wal-Mart hung in the air.

There was no sound of fingers tapping quietly on the laptop, in search of the unexplained. There was no freshly brewed coffee invading his nostrils, accompanied by hot toasted bagels smothered with cream cheese and spoonfuls of sweet strawberry jelly. There was no one assaulting him with pillows, informing him that it was time to get up, clean up and ship out. There was no one to scold him for stumbling back in the early hours of the morning, tossing boots and jeans into a messy pile on the floor before landing in a clumsy heap face down onto the bed. Simply put, there was no Sam.

His arms feel strangely heavy as he raised his hands and rubbed his eyes, preparing for the inevitable. It didn't hurt so much now that the bruises were healing. Sam/Lucifer sure knew how to throw a mean left hook. Running them down his face, he felt the scratch of a course growth, and decided it was time to do what he had been trying in vain to avoid. To face reality.

Laying still he blinked open an eye, and then the other, a faint beam of light peeking through the curtains momentarily blinded him. He had grown accustomed to the dark, so being awake during the day was another reality he had to embrace. Turning his head, he spotted Sams laptop on the table, sitting cold and unused. Jaw ticking, he quickly looked away, but  when they rested on Sams duffel bag he couldn't seem to stop his eyes from watering. Curling his hands into fists, he took deep breaths in an attempt to reel in his emotions. He would give anything right about now just to hear Sam call him a sissy boy.


Empowered with invisible strength, he came to a resolution.

He won't grace the biker bar or the strippers tonight, or any other night. Today was a new beginning, and after taking another glance at Sams duffel bag he awkwardly stood up and grabbed the trashcan. Making his way around the small room he placed the scattered beer bottles into the bin, the dirty laundry tossed onto the unused bed next to his. 

Dragging his feet he made his way to the window and felt a small sense of normalcy, letting the sunlight warm his features when he opened the curtains. It was sweet and inviting, a complete contrast to how he was feeling. Looking out the window he saw children running and playing with the neighborhood dogs. Opening the window he invited the sounds of the outside world into his. A sad smirk crept onto the corner of his mouth.

He thought back to the promise he made to Sam, and god knows he tried to live a normal life if only for a few days. He thought of  Cas, and how big a part he played in the events that lead to Sam being used as Lucifers meat suit. He thought about Bobby and how grateful he was that Cas was able to bring him back to life. But what he wanted more than anything in the whole god for saken world, was his brother. 

The invisible strength he felt earlier was beginning to take hold of him again. From the depths of his soul to the strands of his hair, he was so tired. Tired of hunting, tired of angels and demons, tired of everything. Just plain ole tired of being dicked around. It was time to do things on his terms. Fuck the apocalypse. He was going to break his promise to Sam; he was going to find a way to bring him back. Even if it meant he had to die. Again.

Moving with a renewed purpose he turned away from the window and strode into the bathroom, looking into the mirror.

Glaring at his reflection he thought to himself, "That two timing son of a bitch is gunna die for what he did to Sam. I'm gunna rip out his insides, string 'em up over the fires of hell, and shove 'em down his fucking mouth till he bleeds black and screams for mercy. No screw that, I'm gunna feed 'em to his mangy little soul stealing, meat suit wearing minions."

Payback is a bitch.

A persistent knocking on the motel door drew him out of his thoughts. Sighing heavily he unlatched the chain and turned the lock.

Deans legs buckled beneath him and with a strangled sob he stumbled back.

"Sam?!"


I do not in anyway own Supernatural, I am merely a fan who used Dean and Sam as inspiration for this short piece. 
If you are a follower of the series, you will know that Sam is used by Lucifer as his vessel or 'meat suit'. As much as i wanted to include Chuck into the story (he plays a big part in season 5) I am limited to 1,000 words. This fanfic centres around Dean, and his reaction to Sams absence in his life. It explores the deep bond between brothers, and how the loss of a loved one can either turn you into a bitter twisted man. Or give you strength to finding a solution to making things right again.  I hope you enjoy reading it as much as i enjoyed writing it.

8 comments:

  1. Hi Belinda, I am also a big fan of Supernatural. This is a really good fanfic. I can hear Dean's voice in my head when i'm reading it. I like the way Dean talk in your fanfic. it kida matches with the actual supernatural.when Dean says that he is going to bring sam even if he dies again, ooh~touchy feeling ~what a great brother sam has :)

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  2. hello and thankyou :D
    Because we were limited to only 1,000 words max I couldn't go deeper than what I had originally planned. As you mentioned, I am pleased you could feel Deans words, as he is the protagonist in the story. I didn't want too much dialogue, hence the only spoken word is his brothers name at the very end. My focus was to hone into Deans emotions and thoughts, and I was aiming for readers to identify with the character in some way. I am glad you liked it, thankyou for your input.

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  3. Hi Blinda,
    I can say it was wonderful, you got me into the story, seriously I felt I'm beside Dean. you are right it is hard to mention book or story in 1000 words. but you did good job

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  4. Thankyou Bita, I had to confirm a few small details before finalising the draft but I am pleased you liked the story. I know there are a few swear words, and I had reservations about using them, but after reading a few other fanfics I noticed that a majority of them were based on adventure and humour and some horror. So I wanted to touch base with something a little different. I hate to say this, but it could almost be seen as angst. Thankyou for your input :)

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  5. Hi there,
    Your story did portray the image of Dean and you managed to capture all the emotions going through his mind even the description was well detailed. If there was any one thing I could say for this story is it could have been a bit longer, I enjoyed the entire journey looking through the eyes of Dean understanding the love he had for Sam also since I am a big fan of supernatural myself I have to say I couldn't have written any better.

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  6. hello~~~
    I'm big fan of supernatural too~!
    your fanfic is really nice.easy to understand~
    I agree the comments above ^^
    jod job~!

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  7. Thankyou everyone for your comments, as I said to Farrish my first draft was wordy and decided it would've taken alot more than 1000. So I refined it to make it easier to read, and understand. Please don't forget to read Farrishs' fanfic on Harry Potter. It's actually a really good read.

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  8. Belinda i agree with all the comments above me!!
    I really enjoyed reading your fanfic! The way you portrayed how Dean feels about losing sam makes me relate to the way I feel about my brother not being around! Just not so much anger lol but really well done! Great job

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